AWA Essay Writing Tools : 英-Catch

Issue #2 Text

       If a society is to thrive, it must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens.

Word catch

a society             -- indefinite article -- not specific society -- society of the writer?

thrive                  -- to do well -- healthy -- expanding

must put A before B      --  B is more important than A

overall success    -- considering everything

well-being           -- happy -- healthy

What was said?

1. Society is not thriving, otherwise "if this society is to continue to survive ---"

2. No examples are provided, just a general statement.

3. "success of society" is more important than "the individual".

Choosing your position

    The key to success in the AWA test.

I agree - Society must succeed!

If society fails, everyone fails 

    * Examples of societies that have failed

    * Are there any examples that disprove this idea?

I disagree - The individual is more important!

Is it certain that supporting the individual will damage society?

Changing society is too big a task -- concentrate on something doable

Do you agree that you are not important?


Not so clear

Both the individual and society are important 

It is possible to support both the individual and society

Supporting the individual will make society stronger

Outline

A good outline makes it easy to create a well-structured essay. 

    REMEMBER: your goal is 15-16 sentences of good English.

Society must succeed!

    Introduction: 3 sentences

POSITION               * It is clear that the well-being of society comes before that of the individual. 

BACKGROUND     * Problem(s) created by concentrating on the individual is(are) ??

GOOD FUTURE    * Focusing on society will be create a great future for everyone.

    Example 1: 5 sentences

BACKGROUND                    * Introduce an example of a country/society that has failed.

INTRODUCE ARGUMENT  * This country failed because the goverrnment put too much emphasis on the individual.

SUPPORT ARGUMENT       * Do you have a personal experience about people putting themselves above society?? 

                                                 OR

                                                * Invent scientific paper that describes the problems created by egotists.

EMPHASIZE ARGUMENT   * Describe how your experience / article suggests that there is a much bigger problem.

CONCLUDE ARGUMENT   * Strengthening generalists will solve this problem!

    Example 2:  5 sentences

BACKGROUND                    * Introduce an example of an organization/company/club that has failed.

INTRODUCE ARGUMENT  * Do you have a personal experience of this failure?

                                                OR

                                                 * Invent newspaper article describing the failure of a large organization/ company/club.

SUPPORT ARGUMENT        * Discuss how the organization/ company/club over emphasized the individual.

EMPHASIZE ARGUMENT    * Introduce worse future problem created by shortage of generalists

CONCLUDE ARGUMENT    * This organization/ company/club would still exist if it did not over emphasize the individual


    Conclusion:  2 sentences

MAKE APPEAL    *  The facts are clear

WRAP UP             * I hope you agree with me -- society needs to be placed above the individual. 

The individual is more important!

    Introduction: 3 sentences

 POSITION               * I feel that specialists are not overrated.  

BACKGROUND     * Illustrate/define generalists/specialists

GOOD POINT         * The value provided by specialists

    Example 1: 5 sentences

BACKGROUND                      * Use example of general practioner to illustrate problems with generalists

INTRODUCE ARGUMENT    * Show need for specialists "they are essential"

SUPPORT ARGUMENT         * Do you have a personal experience?? 

                                                    OR

                                                  * Invent newspaper article that describes the people saved by specialists

EMPHASIZE ARGUMENT     * Describe how your experience / this article suggests that specialists are "worth every penney"

CONCLUDE ARGUMENT    * Creating more specialists will solve more problems!

    Example 2:  5 sentences

BACKGROUND                      * Introduce general mechanics/transmission specialists -- what do they do?

INTRODUCE ARGUMENT    * Do you have a personal experience of bad service from general mechanics?

                                                    OR

                                                  * Invent government report stating the crisis in car maintenance due to lack of specialists

SUPPORT ARGUMENT         * Discuss the immediate problem created by shortage of specialists

EMPHASIZE ARGUMENT     * Introduce worse future problem created by shortage of specialists

CONCLUDE ARGUMENT     * Value of having more specialists - easy to create them!

  

Conclusion:  2 sentences

MAKE APPEAL    *  The facts are clear

WRAP UP             * I hope you agree with me -- specialists are essential for modern life and so can not be overrated


Not so clear

Introduction: 3 sentences

    Introduction: 3 sentences

POSITION                * I feel that the current balance of generalists & specialists is good -- no change is needed

BACKGROUND      * Illustrate/define generalists/specialists

GOOD POINT         * The value provided by the cooperation of generalists & specialists

    Example 1: 5 sentences

BACKGROUND                       * Show how general practioners support medical specialists

INTRODUCE ARGUMENT    * General practioners recognize the value of specialists!

SUPPORT ARGUMENT         * Do you have a personal experience?? 

                                                    OR

                                                    * Invent newspaper article that describes the effectiveness of modern medicine

EMPHASIZE ARGUMENT    * Describe how your experience / this article suggests that specialists are "worth every penney"

CONCLUDE ARGUMENT    * Generalists allow specialists to solve big problems!

    Example 2:  5 sentences

BACKGROUND                        * Introduce general mechanics/transmission specialists -- what do they do?

INTRODUCE ARGUMENT      * Do you have a personal experience of good service from repair shops?

                                                    OR

                                                    * Invent government report stating that car maintenance is becoming cheaper

SUPPORT ARGUMENT           * Discuss the immediate problem-- what would happen if there were no specialists

EMPHASIZE ARGUMENT       * Introduce worse future problem created by shortage of specialists

CONCLUDE ARGUMENT       * Value of having more specialists -- easy to create more experts!

Conclusion:  2 sentences

MAKE APPEAL    *  The facts are clear

WRAP UP             * I hope you agree with me -- specialists (and generalists) are essential for modern life

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