AWA Essay Writing Tools : 英-Catch

Argument #1 Text

        The following appeared in a Letter to the Editor of the Shady Village newspaper.

"Commuters are complaining that the rush hour traffic on Blue Highway between Shady Village and Bright City has doubled their commuting time. Some commuters have asked that an additional traffic lane be built, but the recent creation of such a lane on nearby Green Highway apparently attracted more commuters, judging from the fact that rush-hour traffic jams actually increased there this past winter. To reduce rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway, a bicycle lane should be added instead of a traffic lane. This approach will succeed because many citizens of Shady Village are avid bicyclists; 75 percent of respondents to a recent questionnaire distributed there said they would like to bicycle more hours per week than they currently do."

Word/Expression Catch



commuters are complaining
     -- complaining is a sign of a serious problem?
rush hour traffic                        -- mainly business people affected? use this phrase in your reply
doubled their commuting time  -- what is their commuting time?  3 minutes -> 6 minutes is serious?

some commuters            -- not all
additional traffic lane     -- neutral expression, no negative statement made
such a lane                     -- makes a parallel to the Green City Highway
apparently attracted more commuters     -- apparaently is a rather weak expression, indicates uncertainty.
rush-hour traffic jams     -- particular time, mainly business people
increased there               -- degree of increase is large or small, details missing

to reduce rush-hour traffic        -- not to "eliminate" rush-hour traffic
bicycle lane should be added    -- what is a bicycle lane? What does it take to add a bicycle lane?
instead of a traffic lane              -- neutral expression, no negative statement made

many citizens                -- percentage of population is unclear
avid bicyclists               -- adjective of "avid" is unwarranted, not supported by the facts presented?
respondents to a questionnaire    -- questionnaire was widely distributed? Who to?
more hours per week    -- how many hours now? are they willing to bike to work?

Conclusion-Premises-Arguments

        An important part of success in the AWA argument test.  

Commuters are complaining that the rush hour traffic on Blue Highway between Shady Village and Bright City has doubled their commuting time.        Premise #1  -- fact? they are complaining 
Some commuters have asked that an additional traffic lane be built, but the recent creation of such a lane on nearby Green Highway apparently attracted more commuters, judging from the fact that rush-hour traffic jams actually increased there this past winter.     Premise #2  -- fact? some commuters have asked for extra lane
    Argument #1 “but the recent creation of -- apparently attracted more commuters,”
    Premise #3 -- fact? traffic jams increased after the extra lane was added
To reduce rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway, a bicycle lane should be added instead of a traffic lane.       Goal -- reduce rush-hour traffic
    Conclusion: ADD A BIKE LANE TO BLUE HIGHWAY
This approach will succeed because many citizens of Shady Village are avid bicyclists; 75 percent of respondents to a recent questionnaire distributed there said they would like to bicycle more hours per week than they currently do.        Argument #2 -- "this approach will succeed because"
    Premise #4 -- "75% would like to bike more often"


Analyze the statements


To reduce rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway, a bicycle lane should be added instead of a traffic lane.Goal: reduce rush hour traffic on Blue Highway
Only two approaches given – why not more?
Bicycle lane is best – why? – what are the facts?
Premise #1: Commuters are complaining that the rush hour traffic on Blue Highway between Shady Village and Bright City has doubled their commuting time. What data is known?
Commuters are complaining: verbal/written?
No studies by independent experts?
Premise #2: Some commuters have asked that an additional traffic lane be built, Argument #1: but the recent creation of such a lane on nearby Green Highway apparently attracted more commuters, judging from the fact that
Premise #3: rush-hour traffic jams actually increased there this past winter.
Some commuters – how many? Could be only 3! Without number relative to overall driving population this is a useless statement.
 
   Argument: adding a traffic lane is a useless strategy because it has the opposite effect from the one intended.

   Premiseincrease in jams may be due to increase in drivers – without the extra traffic lane the increase in time may have been worse!
 This approach will succeed because of
Premise #4
: many citizens of Shady Village are avid bicyclists; 75 percent of respondents to a recent questionnaire distributed there said they would like to bicycle more hours per week than they currently do.
  Supporting Statement:  dogmatic statement – not effective as it is likely to create resistance to the argument.

  Premise: the respondents are what percentage of the driving population?

  Did the respondents actually state that they wanted to bicycle to work? NO

Outline your argument


To reduce rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway, a bicycle lane should be added instead of a traffic lane.Goal: reduce rush hour traffic on Blue Highway
YOU MUST ACCEPT THIS STATEMENT
 
The action of adding an extra lane will be expensive
IRRATIONAL REDUCTION TO 2 ALTERNATIVES
Premise #1: Commuters are complaining that the rush hour traffic on Blue Highway between Shady Village and Bright City has doubled their commuting time. Need quantitative studies by independent experts


INFORMATION PROVIDED INSUFFICIENT
Premise #2: Some commuters have asked that an additional traffic lane be built, Argument #1: but the recent creation of such a lane on nearby Green Highway apparently attracted more commuters, judging from the fact that
Premise #3: rush-hour traffic jams actually increased there this past winter.
Key argument against additional traffic lane is not persuasive as supporting evidence could be due to other factors




KEY ARGUMENT USELESS
 This approach will succeed because Premise #4: many citizens of Shady Village are avid bicyclists; 75 percent of respondents to a recent questionnaire distributed there said they would like to bicycle more hours per week than they currently do.Second argument – bicycle lane will be popular – is not supported by useful data
Conclusion: writer has failed to present a persuasive argument.
The key failures are that the writer did not prove that
   1. the problem exists
   2. the problem warrants spending money
   3. adding a bicycle lane will solve the problem

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